考研英語小作文批改投訴信5-7分例文4

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　5-7分

　　第四篇

　　Dear Sir ，

　　I am a customer of your store. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about a box of pen that I bought it from yours.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the quality of the pens is bad. In the first place，I found there is less two pens when I opened the box. In addition，a pen was broken and it didnt work. Under these circumstances， I find it very to your store.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could give me there pens，preferably replace the whole box，and I would like to have this matter settled by one day.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely，

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir ，

　　I am a customer of your store. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about a box of pen that I bought it(刪除)from yours.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the quality of the pens is bad(刪除). In the first place，I found there is less two pens when I opened the box(不用there be 句型，可改為I found the box lacked of 2 pens when I opened it). In addition，a pen was broken and it didnt work. Under these circumstances， I find it very to your store.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could give me there pens，preferably replace the whole box，and I would like to have this matter settled by(因為后面加的是具體時間，因此這里改為in) one day.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely，

　　Li Ming

　　5分

　　同學你好，考研小作文的字數要求是100詞，不要超過太多，考試時間很緊張，把過多的時間用在寫小作文上是不合理的。小作文字數已經很少了，因此盡量要避免出現整句錯誤。

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　5-7分

　　第四篇

　　Dear Sir ，

　　I am a customer of your store. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about a box of pen that I bought it from yours.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the quality of the pens is bad. In the first place，I found there is less two pens when I opened the box. In addition，a pen was broken and it didnt work. Under these circumstances， I find it very to your store.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could give me there pens，preferably replace the whole box，and I would like to have this matter settled by one day.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely，

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir ，

　　I am a customer of your store. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about a box of pen that I bought it(刪除)from yours.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the quality of the pens is bad(刪除). In the first place，I found there is less two pens when I opened the box(不用there be 句型，可改為I found the box lacked of 2 pens when I opened it). In addition，a pen was broken and it didnt work. Under these circumstances， I find it very to your store.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could give me there pens，preferably replace the whole box，and I would like to have this matter settled by(因為后面加的是具體時間，因此這里改為in) one day.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely，

　　Li Ming

　　5分

　　同學你好，考研小作文的字數要求是100詞，不要超過太多，考試時間很緊張，把過多的時間用在寫小作文上是不合理的。小作文字數已經很少了，因此盡量要避免出現整句錯誤。